Today
1 big linker
This, Such, which
No stuff, full forms
We use the same Day 6 PEEL and the same ideas, with better flow.
1 Look
2 Choose / Type
3 Check
4 Complete
Questions: Adapted for class from IELTS Liz 100 Essay Questions and British Council Take IELTS Writing. Free classroom use.
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1 minFrom PEEL to flow.
Q1: Online learning is better. Your Day 6 Point: One clear advantage is flexibility.
One clear advantage of online learning is flexibility.
Trap?
Look4 linkers, but 0 real links.
Moreover, flexible. Furthermore, rewatch. Moreover, good. In addition, good.
How many linkers should you keep?
What is the rule?
This Such
WordsDo not use ‘Moreover’. Use ‘This’ and ‘Such’.
Online study is flexible. This advantage lets students rewatch. Such access reduces stress.
What does ‘This advantage’ link back to?
Lessons help. reduces stress.
Say it aloud
Join it
TypeJoin ideas inside the sentence, not between sentences.
Flexibility is useful lessons can be rewatched.
Lessons can be rewatched help busy students.
online is flexible, interaction is weak.
Say it aloud
Tone?
FormalUse formal words, not spoken words.
What is the formal word for ‘stuff’?
What are the formal forms of contractions?
Students help.
Which flows?
LookWhich one stops and which one flows?
A Moreover, flexible. Furthermore, rewatch. Moreover, good. In addition, good.
B One advantage is flexibility. Lessons which can be rewatched help. This flexibility reduces stress because students review at own pace. Even so, not enough alone.
Which paragraph flows better?
Why does it flow better?
Fix it
With teacherCut 3 linkers and keep 1.
Bad: Moreover, flexible. Furthermore, rewatch. Moreover, good. In addition, not enough.
One clear advantage is .
Lessons can be rewatched help.
One clear advantage of online learning is flexibility. Lessons which can be rewatched help busy students. This flexibility reduces stress because students can review at their own pace. Even so, this benefit alone does not beat live interaction.
Tone up
FormalNo ‘stuff’. Use full forms.
Informal: Online stuff is good. You get a lot. Do not worry, you cannot fail.
Online study has .
Students help.
Online study has valuable aspects. Students receive considerable help because lessons can be reviewed. They do not need to worry, and they cannot fall behind. This flexibility is valuable.
You fix PEEL
You do 8:00Now write by yourself. Take 8 minutes.
Take your Day 6 PEEL and keep the ideas. Fix the flow and tone: use 1 linker, ‘This’ plus a noun, ‘which’ or ‘because’. Write full forms like ‘do not’, not ‘don’t’.
Press Start, then write your paragraph.
One clear advantage of online learning is flexibility. Lessons which can be rewatched help busy students. This flexibility reduces stress because students can review at their own pace. Even so, this benefit alone does not make online learning better overall.
Check + list
1 fixChoose one fix to focus on.
| My sentence | Better | My try |
|---|---|---|
| Moreover, moreover, moreover. | Even so, this flexibility helps. | Lessons which can be rewatched help. |
What is your fix today?
1 hard3 ok5 smooth
Homework: Fix your PEEL, then learn ‘This’, ‘Such’, ‘which’, ‘do not’ and ‘receive’.
Done Annisa
Your flow is smooth and your tone is formal. Your PEEL is ready.
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